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| Bodshivita |
Posted on 09-28-12, 09:59 pm
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Overachiever
Posts: 24/65 Since: 09-26-12 Last post: 4187 days Last view: 4178 days |
It is evident that my grammar isn't the best, hence my need to have an skilled editor/proofreader such as Ibdou. So in the interest of bettering myself, I will learn how to use the excessively common comma properly.
Poor bastard: "How much?" Lilith: "Twenty metric fuck tons of gold and I'm all yours, hawtstuff~" Poor bastard: "Uh miss, a fuckton isn't an actual unit of measurement." Lilith: "Bullshit, a metric fuckton is 1000 metric assloads. Which, if you actually fucking went to school, you'd know was equal to 32.5 Helluvalots." |
| Iubdou |
Posted on 09-29-12, 04:32 am
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Posts: 16/22 Since: 09-26-12 Last post: 4219 days Last view: 4161 days |
And now, editing/proofreading/revising time~ |
| Bodshivita |
Posted on 09-29-12, 05:55 am (revision 1)
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Overachiever
Posts: 27/65 Since: 09-26-12 Last post: 4187 days Last view: 4178 days |
Wooot!~ After you're done I'll get started again, I got caught up in a bunch of weird shit on F list to say the very least, though I did gain invaluable sexperiance points that I dumped into my writing skillz, so that's a plus.
Poor bastard: "How much?" Lilith: "Twenty metric fuck tons of gold and I'm all yours, hawtstuff~" Poor bastard: "Uh miss, a fuckton isn't an actual unit of measurement." Lilith: "Bullshit, a metric fuckton is 1000 metric assloads. Which, if you actually fucking went to school, you'd know was equal to 32.5 Helluvalots." |
| Iubdou |
Posted on 09-29-12, 06:43 am
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Posts: 17/22 Since: 09-26-12 Last post: 4219 days Last view: 4161 days |
I'm not entirely sure how best to send you the edits I've made, considering I copy/pasted it into a separate document and turned on the change tracker. How would you prefer it? Also, your run-on sentences bug me a little. Brevity can be just as useful as ornate language sometimes. |
| Bodshivita |
Posted on 09-29-12, 07:07 am (revision 2)
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Overachiever
Posts: 28/65 Since: 09-26-12 Last post: 4187 days Last view: 4178 days |
If you wouldn't mind doing so, you can just edit it yourself since I've allowed all users with the link to edit it freely, else you could just send it to Bodshivita@gmail.com, or dump it in Syx.T.Nyne my new Skype profile. Both were created for the sole of purpose getting ideas, assistance, etc for my projects.
Poor bastard: "How much?" Lilith: "Twenty metric fuck tons of gold and I'm all yours, hawtstuff~" Poor bastard: "Uh miss, a fuckton isn't an actual unit of measurement." Lilith: "Bullshit, a metric fuckton is 1000 metric assloads. Which, if you actually fucking went to school, you'd know was equal to 32.5 Helluvalots." |
| Iubdou |
Posted on 09-29-12, 07:16 am
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Posts: 18/22 Since: 09-26-12 Last post: 4219 days Last view: 4161 days |
But if I edit it myself then you'll never learn... I'll send you the file so you can look over it and see what changes I made. If any of them confuse you, just let me know. |
| Bodshivita |
Posted on 09-29-12, 06:40 pm
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Overachiever
Posts: 31/65 Since: 09-26-12 Last post: 4187 days Last view: 4178 days |
Not at all, with guidance from the two of you I've finally come to grasp the importance of punctuation (about damn time!). In order to become an effective smut factory, I need to take steps in order to maintain the reader's willing suspension of disbelief, stopping them from calling bull shit in a manner similar to your first post. Once I master this elusive skill all that's left is world domination.
Poor bastard: "How much?" Lilith: "Twenty metric fuck tons of gold and I'm all yours, hawtstuff~" Poor bastard: "Uh miss, a fuckton isn't an actual unit of measurement." Lilith: "Bullshit, a metric fuckton is 1000 metric assloads. Which, if you actually fucking went to school, you'd know was equal to 32.5 Helluvalots." |
| Iubdou |
Posted on 09-29-12, 07:23 pm
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Posts: 22/22 Since: 09-26-12 Last post: 4219 days Last view: 4161 days |
Actually, once you master punctuation a whole new world of options becomes available to you. Everything you write is a choice, every word is a statement about how you want the end product to be read. Punctuation makes the choices you're already making clearer, and then you learn how to improve the choices you're making. |
| Bodshivita |
Posted on 09-29-12, 08:25 pm (revision 1)
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Overachiever
Posts: 32/65 Since: 09-26-12 Last post: 4187 days Last view: 4178 days |
I see, it seems I need to get my ass in gear then. As stated in the master Doc, the scenes marked as done or complete in it's respective slot are now fully edited, optimized for lewdness and ready to implement. Update: Currently working on scissoring (sounds too bland, this needs a better name.), fellatio scenes for the excessively large cocks out there (all the way through, and I mean all the way!), and the suit up branch (I have something special in mind for characters with the slime body type.). Poor bastard: "How much?" Lilith: "Twenty metric fuck tons of gold and I'm all yours, hawtstuff~" Poor bastard: "Uh miss, a fuckton isn't an actual unit of measurement." Lilith: "Bullshit, a metric fuckton is 1000 metric assloads. Which, if you actually fucking went to school, you'd know was equal to 32.5 Helluvalots." |
| Bodshivita |
Posted on 10-02-12, 08:11 pm (revision 2)
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Overachiever
Posts: 36/65 Since: 09-26-12 Last post: 4187 days Last view: 4178 days |
Updates (Will be thrown up on tha OP later.) ETA on the completion of the "basic" slime content is Wednesday, yes I said it'd be done last weekend but that was me from four day ago going at a breakneck pace. I wasn't thinking carefully like I am now. Second project: Nekomimi/kemonomimi content just as comprehensive as the slime stuff. There will be sex, items, history and culture. I'm gonna wait till Iubdou hits me with his ideas. Third project: Dryads that randomly generate in forest and grassland biomes. Fourth project: An abandoned factory that the demonic legions set up during the initial invasion. Thyar be sex bots in dare... Oi muffin man, would you kindly take a look at what I have for the slime cores (it's on da master doc). I'd like to know how hard it would be to code or eventually implement it. Poor bastard: "How much?" Lilith: "Twenty metric fuck tons of gold and I'm all yours, hawtstuff~" Poor bastard: "Uh miss, a fuckton isn't an actual unit of measurement." Lilith: "Bullshit, a metric fuckton is 1000 metric assloads. Which, if you actually fucking went to school, you'd know was equal to 32.5 Helluvalots." |
| Bodshivita |
Posted on 10-06-12, 08:14 am (revision 2)
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Overachiever
Posts: 46/65 Since: 09-26-12 Last post: 4187 days Last view: 4178 days |
Gonna write dafuq outta Chelsie as part of the nekomimi content, it'll be cake since I already have a fuck ton of info ta werk with. I image her as cool, calm an confident in the spunky kinda way, secure in her place as one of the apex predators of Nox. She's the kinda gurl you can kick it with, but she'll take you when she's ready, no sooner no latter. When Chelsie tops she's nota bitch about it, she's playful...fully content to toy with her prey. While not the sharpest tool in the box, she ain't a fool either and when faced with someone more intelligent than her, she plays it cool stammering a bit in embarrassment while trying to keep up as best she can. On the rare occasions where the hunter becomes da prey, she's chill about it because it'z the circle of life ya kno and it's lonely at the top. She can play the sub role if the time comes, purring like a kitten, despite how unused to the miraculous situation she finds herself in. Chelsie likes the smooth talkers and is willing to give'em a lil slack...but jussst a little bit; she can't let'em get too smug after all. As a huntress she keeps her body nice and fit, living off a diet composed off of almost entirely meat. As for sexual preferences...a fuck's a fuck right? It shouldn't matter if you're packing a piece of meat for her to play with, a steamy, honey pot to eat out or both. Overall, she may like ta talk shit, live by her predatory instincts and is so damn sassy, but she's sexy and she knows it. Chelsie's parents raised a tough gal, bring'n her up in a nice, aggressive environment, she's used to a lil rough'n tumble and won't hesitate to show ya how she express her affections...the way ma an pop did. If she likes you she'll letcha know...in her own way of course. (Let me know if I've missed anything, or if there are any extra details that you'd like in Kawa. This is simply my break down of her character from the feedback you've compiled.) Poor bastard: "How much?" Lilith: "Twenty metric fuck tons of gold and I'm all yours, hawtstuff~" Poor bastard: "Uh miss, a fuckton isn't an actual unit of measurement." Lilith: "Bullshit, a metric fuckton is 1000 metric assloads. Which, if you actually fucking went to school, you'd know was equal to 32.5 Helluvalots." |
| Kawa |
Posted on 10-06-12, 09:52 am
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<i>Prophet of Celestia</i><br>Baka on the streets, senpai in the sheets
 Posts: 83/344 Since: 06-08-12 Last post: 1691 days Last view: 1231 days |
I'd say Chel would be bisexual but leaning towards heterosexuality, considering her (futile) goal of having kids. The only obvious way she's not that sharp is in her inability to recognize her infertility. As shown by this promo pic, she'd consider the Demon World an interesting place. I'd link to the Tumblr copy, but they're on scheduled downtime at the moment. <small>#come on it'll be fun #i hear they make a wicked cheezburger there</small> I don't just program Noxico... |
| Bodshivita |
Posted on 10-06-12, 01:24 pm (revision 2)
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Overachiever
Posts: 47/65 Since: 09-26-12 Last post: 4187 days Last view: 4178 days |
S'coo with me, there could be a quest line where the pc could bring her fertility enhancing items ta get her knocked up. As for her attitude towards the demon realm, I was never gonna work in demon hate into her biography anyhow. Why can't there be characters that think a cesspool of debauchery is da shit? Breast milk in da daemon realm comes in all teh flavors, all of them! Speaking of the demon realm, we seriously gotta expand the history of the game. Give the "Demon Realm" a decent name for starters, Oblivion, Tartarus, Mealfas, Malfi, Yomi, Dis, Helheim, Ophidian and several others come to mind. What are the goals of the demonic forces? What are their methods? Fuck, I'm gonna start a thread for this too. Poor bastard: "How much?" Lilith: "Twenty metric fuck tons of gold and I'm all yours, hawtstuff~" Poor bastard: "Uh miss, a fuckton isn't an actual unit of measurement." Lilith: "Bullshit, a metric fuckton is 1000 metric assloads. Which, if you actually fucking went to school, you'd know was equal to 32.5 Helluvalots." |
| Bodshivita |
Posted on 10-12-12, 12:01 am (revision 1)
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Overachiever
Posts: 51/65 Since: 09-26-12 Last post: 4187 days Last view: 4178 days |
I'm taking 120 hours off of work next week. I had vacation days piling up and my superior suggested I take a break, so I'll be spending all of that time starting tomorrow writing. Oi Kawa! If you have not seen it already, I've been pitching Noxico to some talented people over on the CoC boards. I don't know if you have a problem with vampires or not but it's worth looking into. I picture vampires working in Nox just as they do in TES. If you gorge upon (Blood, Souls, Sexual fluids, Emotions) then the sun won't affect you. As you go without feeding you gain more power and less resistance to the sun, with your vulnerability increasing till you reach the final stage and take sun damage every n ticks. Poor bastard: "How much?" Lilith: "Twenty metric fuck tons of gold and I'm all yours, hawtstuff~" Poor bastard: "Uh miss, a fuckton isn't an actual unit of measurement." Lilith: "Bullshit, a metric fuckton is 1000 metric assloads. Which, if you actually fucking went to school, you'd know was equal to 32.5 Helluvalots." |
| Kawa |
Posted on 10-12-12, 03:15 pm
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<i>Prophet of Celestia</i><br>Baka on the streets, senpai in the sheets
Posts: 85/344 Since: 06-08-12 Last post: 1691 days Last view: 1231 days |
No vampires please. At least, I'm not planning to implement all they involve. Maybe much later. Enjoy your break. I don't just program Noxico... |
| Bodshivita |
Posted on 10-12-12, 07:20 pm
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Overachiever
Posts: 52/65 Since: 09-26-12 Last post: 4187 days Last view: 4178 days |
It's a shame I thought I could get something going in that department...
Heh, I'll probably develop a mild case of insomnia from working on my projects...I've got that thing over on CoC too, but it's almost done and I won't be the one updating it...at least I hope not O.o Poor bastard: "How much?" Lilith: "Twenty metric fuck tons of gold and I'm all yours, hawtstuff~" Poor bastard: "Uh miss, a fuckton isn't an actual unit of measurement." Lilith: "Bullshit, a metric fuckton is 1000 metric assloads. Which, if you actually fucking went to school, you'd know was equal to 32.5 Helluvalots." |
| Bodshivita |
Posted on 10-26-12, 09:52 pm (revision 1)
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Overachiever
Posts: 61/65 Since: 09-26-12 Last post: 4187 days Last view: 4178 days |
So, for the past week I've been work'n on this https://docs.google.com/document/d/1oTCBvnLm3UbKIrU9qLXM4JClbxPXmGMtrpw2nGL7UQM/edit#heading=h.30axg19geup The above project has gotten a lot of attention and will be completed Sunday; this is essentially months worth of work done in the span of a week. The Cheetah bitch is next on my list. Next week, I am going to lock myself in a dark room, with a bunch'a booze, while crank'n up Beethoven's greatest works....in order to >:) RAVENGE, Chelsie's doc! >:) Seriously, I'm making waves in this line of Pro bono writing. Poor bastard: "How much?" Lilith: "Twenty metric fuck tons of gold and I'm all yours, hawtstuff~" Poor bastard: "Uh miss, a fuckton isn't an actual unit of measurement." Lilith: "Bullshit, a metric fuckton is 1000 metric assloads. Which, if you actually fucking went to school, you'd know was equal to 32.5 Helluvalots." |
